Ahh... shit. lol
Good story... only add more if you're planning on making it happy, though. Another chapter that would end up being "And then they died" would be kind of pointless because that's what the reader is assuming.
Good job keeping my attention (I'm kind of ADD at the moment.) Very suspenseful, well written. I'd encourage a happy addition to the story, but it's your choice.
Author's Response: thanks. it means a lot. I think I will add to it, but it may just take a while and a shitload of... inspiration? no, thats not the word i'm looking for but it's something of that nature....