Do you mind if i give you some constuctive criticism? When you write the boys dialogue it sounds like something a girl would say, and really whiny and kinda irritating. No offense i really love this story but i just wanted to tell you. I hope you dont get offended.Author's Response: That's an excellent point. I just received an email about this review, and I actually had completely forgotten about this website. Firstly, I wrote this story several years ago, when I was just a kiddy in 8th or 9th grade. I am now in college and have much more important things to worry about. Secondly, I appreciate your criticism, but Good Charlotte has not been of interest to me in years. If I cared enough to edit this story, I would. I'm sorry. Please don't take this the wrong way. Thank you for caring enough to read this again and I appreciate your comments/criticism.